Antigone Cadmus

I can't really nit-pick this, since it is a diary. I'm really resisting the urge to tear apart your grammar... Oh well. The only thing I would say is that ...

I am not trying to be rude at all. But the way that you portray the characters is not right. It doesn't have that much detail to go with it. ...

Hey, Vampirewolf3! I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer for today. ^_^ In the far corner of the onyx Club Capitalize Onyx. his cold one This just bothers me. You ...

Hey, Rosey! Karen looked out the airplane window as they landed. The grass was covered by a pitiful amount of snow, especially for mid-December. I agree with AshleyLee, this could ...

Konnichiwa, Otto-kun! I don't know why this has happened I lower my head and my face has saddened The "saddened" part sounds like you were just desperate for a rhyme ...

Hey, KaityJay! Welcome to YWS! My critique is in bold. Blood i fell to the ground... Capitalize I paralyzed by the pain. cant anyone help me? Remember the apostrophe: It ...

Hey, Voxina! First, let me say you are very brave. I know that doesn't help you, but I just wanted to say that. I'm sure a lot of people can ...

Hey, Bianca Fanatic (sorry, I have the need to grammatically correct everyone's user names.) I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer today. ^_^ 10 or 15 minutes. Always spell out ...

Everyone keeps beating me to the nit-picks today! *grumbles* Oh well. There are only a few things I want to say. -It really bugs me how the twins refer to ...

Nooooooo! R Gallagher already reviewed the nit-picks! That is my favorite thing to review! *pouts* Oh well. I guess I'll review it in general. General Review -Okay, pretend your parents ...

Hey, Rhode! I'm Sakura and I'll be your reviewer for today. ^_^ Like RGhallager said, you should have two review of others work before you post your own work. Thanks! ...

Across Five Aprils Complete torture. I had to read it for school, and I have no idea how I was the one who got the highest score on the test. ...

Hey, Power of Three (sorry, I have a tendency to grammatically correct people's user names) It seems as though you took my advice and began writing your story. Now, let's ...

Hey, boltageman! Welcome to YWS! It's a great place to get critique for your work so you should return the favor! Before you post your own work, you should have ...

Lol. This is pretty funny, actually. I think you should title it "Death Note Parody" instead. I was expecting some serious story where Light creates his Utopia or something ^_^ ...